today's moon; will there be anyone not taking up his pen? Onitsura
I wonder if "stand idle" and "on the corner" could change places?
I see what you mean - subject, actionsometimes it comes down to cadence; maybe diversity of form - I'm still musing . . . reading textbooks on an entirely different subject, currently.
. . . still musing. A "street corner" has significance, much like a kigo . . .
They could change places, but it changes the emphasis. If you end with "stand idle," it seems to be about the police and inaction.
Interesting discussion.snow and saltthe streets still crunchin Minnesota
It's actually just what popped into my wee brain - that's a good thing, right?
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