Saturday, February 4, 2012





















light frost and white sky
police cars on the corner
standing idle


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6 comments:

Bill said...

I wonder if "stand idle" and "on the corner" could change places?

bandit said...

I see what you mean - subject, action

sometimes it comes down to cadence; maybe diversity of form - I'm still musing . . . reading textbooks on an entirely different subject, currently.

bandit said...

. . . still musing. A "street corner" has significance, much like a kigo . . .

Anonymous said...

They could change places, but it changes the emphasis. If you end with "stand idle," it seems to be about the police and inaction.

Rick.Daddario said...

Interesting discussion.


snow and salt
the streets still crunch
in Minnesota

bandit said...

It's actually just what popped into my wee brain - that's a good thing, right?