tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8824606926603448809.post7701202628695965106..comments2024-03-25T05:50:50.081-05:00Comments on HAIKU BANDIT SOCIETY: Bristlecone: a nouveau renkubandithttp://www.blogger.com/profile/04291863523347898783noreply@blogger.comBlogger237125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8824606926603448809.post-5786739159175577412012-01-01T06:46:39.084-06:002012-01-01T06:46:39.084-06:00Thank you, dearest Sandra, and thank you all, my d...Thank you, dearest Sandra, and thank you all, my dearest renju friends. It's not facetious to repeat this was the most pleasurable time I've had composing renku - the finest present for Christmas one could receive, and a hopeful inspiration fo the new year.bandithttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04291863523347898783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8824606926603448809.post-21254179902157453822012-01-01T03:00:30.086-06:002012-01-01T03:00:30.086-06:00Hello Willie,
Have been off air for a few days, w...Hello Willie,<br /><br />Have been off air for a few days, what with the holidays an' all.<br /><br />Your "impetuous" renku has turned out very well, thanks to your vision and leadership and great verses from the contributors.<br /><br />"Bristlecone" is a product of which to be proud.<br /><br />Best wishes,<br />Sandrasandranoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8824606926603448809.post-69801034919263286902011-12-31T20:42:59.194-06:002011-12-31T20:42:59.194-06:00Sound great, Willie, attribute away!
I like how ...Sound great, Willie, attribute away! <br /><br />I like how the renku has its share of wild shifts (amongst more logical ones) and the unexpected shifts are very pleasing, great to see the idea of a 'New' Renku working outside of Junicho too.<br /><br />I'll be back for the moon-viewing party too - thanks for the invite, and great to work with everyone on this. PRetty exciting huh?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8824606926603448809.post-68163044145264190002011-12-31T11:45:05.317-06:002011-12-31T11:45:05.317-06:00I'll be back for the moon viewing party :)
Ha...I'll be back for the moon viewing party :)<br /><br />Happy New Year!Vidahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09445214590810247776noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8824606926603448809.post-47894812750787913732011-12-31T06:06:55.325-06:002011-12-31T06:06:55.325-06:00Good eye, Barb! One change to V 9,
same message an...Good eye, Barb! One change to V 9,<br />same message and tone, sweetens things up nice.<br /><br />Gosh, ya'll sound like this is a long farewell- we'll be talking before the Draconids, won't we? <br />Sure we will!bandithttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04291863523347898783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8824606926603448809.post-86852835623734661352011-12-29T16:08:04.704-06:002011-12-29T16:08:04.704-06:00g'day
Thanks Willie for leading this enjoyab...g'day <br /><br />Thanks Willie for leading this enjoyable renku. I enjoyed the speed at which we all worked. It reads well, but, I notice that we have three verses commencing with how. Funny, it didn't strike me before. Am not sure if you wish to change that.<br /><br />Peace and LoveBarbara A Taylorhttp://batsword.tripod.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8824606926603448809.post-77441712359112547942011-12-29T10:44:43.621-06:002011-12-29T10:44:43.621-06:00I really enjoyed being part of this creation. A bi...I really enjoyed being part of this creation. A big Thank you to all of you, guys! <br />:))Vidahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09445214590810247776noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8824606926603448809.post-77985247173746176202011-12-29T09:45:48.438-06:002011-12-29T09:45:48.438-06:00Ya'll come back now, hear?
I have your E-mail...Ya'll come back now, hear?<br /><br />I have your E-mail and will contact you as to the disposition of this poem and further adventures. I'm glad you were able to stomach my wacked-out style!<br /><br />Love, <br /><br />williebandithttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04291863523347898783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8824606926603448809.post-66365844175126091752011-12-29T08:33:25.286-06:002011-12-29T08:33:25.286-06:00dear willie,
i have enjoyed the ride with your me...dear willie,<br /><br />i have enjoyed the ride with your merry band. thanks for all of your efforts in making this renku happen!<br /><br />blessings to all of my fellow travelers,<br />patpat nhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13175175191051242187noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8824606926603448809.post-65493049118965604702011-12-29T08:02:54.155-06:002011-12-29T08:02:54.155-06:00the scent of cilantro
from my old umbrella
... ...the scent of cilantro<br /> from my old umbrella<br /> <br />... gendai<br /> <br /><br />inside the volume<br /> of Van Gogh's letters,<br /> one pressed flower<br /> <br />... literature<br /> <br /><br /><br />we vow to meet again<br />for the next Draconids display<br /><br />... shasei<br /><br /><br />a little alliteration is good for the soul, no?<br /><br />Another suggested change; attribute the Ashley/Barbara verse to Barb, Ashley to Ashley . . .<br /><br />dust to dust? I hope not. I imagine this poem will live on for quite some time, due to its "historic" nature, in regards to renku, that is.<br /><br />I'm a bit fagged out due to a variety of factors, so not much more to comment on at the moment. I'll post these to the main page, so, have a look and see what you think. Looking forward to your comments. Oh, one other thing; I propose the title of <b>Bristlecone</b>, for the reason of the multi-faceted nature of this composition. Let's run it up the flagpole and see if anybody salutes. I'll check back later for comments, maybe a summation of sorts. Perhaps we'll talk about submission to some journal somewhere?<br /><br />Until then,<br /><br />williebandithttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04291863523347898783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8824606926603448809.post-77031759114190597412011-12-29T08:00:57.821-06:002011-12-29T08:00:57.821-06:00in the land of Honah Lee
anything is possible
;-)...in the land of Honah Lee<br />anything is possible<br /><br />;-)<br />musicpat nhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13175175191051242187noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8824606926603448809.post-54805034066413193602011-12-28T18:21:29.328-06:002011-12-28T18:21:29.328-06:00Just got one in me at the moment!
listening to th...Just got one in me at the moment!<br /><br />listening to the traffic<br />stutter<br />coffee in hand<br /><br /><br />(might have too much of a cut)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8824606926603448809.post-23953141396613616332011-12-28T16:37:20.047-06:002011-12-28T16:37:20.047-06:00g'day all
my offer:
an urgent text message...g'day all<br /><br /><br /><br />my offer:<br /><br />an urgent text message<br />from the dragon! <br /><br />or segue to<br /><br />starry night<br />the whale's song reaches shore<br /><br />like this but we already have ashore and sea earlier, <br /><br />and<br /><br /> <br />we vow to meet again<br />for the next Draconids shower<br /><br />I like this one best and enjoy the end rhyme with flower<br /><br />Peace and LoveBarbara A Taylorhttp://batsword.tripod.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8824606926603448809.post-40613032704992935412011-12-28T15:13:41.235-06:002011-12-28T15:13:41.235-06:00amazing plant! :)amazing plant! :)Vidahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09445214590810247776noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8824606926603448809.post-13719532255066401812011-12-28T15:08:10.252-06:002011-12-28T15:08:10.252-06:00Willie,
I like what you did with the meteor verse...Willie,<br /><br />I like what you did with the meteor verse, but just notice something obvious- flower and shower rhyme. I know it was my idea and I have no idea why I didn't see it earlier. What are the rules?<br /><br />We watched The Big Blue (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/The_Big_Blue) yesterday, so the more I read the whales' verse (both versions) the more I like it :))<br /><br />Let's wait a bit for the rest of the team?Vidahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09445214590810247776noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8824606926603448809.post-59876270182750544802011-12-28T14:50:55.590-06:002011-12-28T14:50:55.590-06:00Here's a note or two on my musings and searche...Here's a note or two on my musings and searches:<br /><br />considering beats per line on one of Pat's offerings, another suggestion to better retain her ideas, losing "the"<br /><br />no one knows exactly<br />why humpback whales sing<br /><br />segue to<br /><br />starry night<br />the whale's song reaches shore<br /><br />(softer ch sounds in 'reaches', more alliterative?)and on to<br /><br />we vow to meet again<br />for the next Draconids shower<br /><br />"for' - a round vowel sound, and 'Draconids' sans the 'meteor' since that is implied in shower, plus reference to the impending Year of the Dragon, maybe?<br /><br />Haven't heard from Barb or Ash on this position . . .<br /><br />links to a range of meteor showers, north and south - <br /><br />http://earthsky.org/astronomy-essentials/earthskys-meteor-shower-guidebandithttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04291863523347898783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8824606926603448809.post-46354553553030794732011-12-28T14:16:42.414-06:002011-12-28T14:16:42.414-06:00A type of Burdock, I think (can't remember). I...A type of Burdock, I think (can't remember). It was used to make clothing, brought by French immigrants: the process went out of style with the invention of the cotton gin in the mid-19th century. It grows in all sorts of adverse conditions - now termed an invasive weed. It is one hardy plant; can't pull it up with your bare hands due to all the thorny projections on the stems which are nearly as sturdy as a deciduous tree sapling. it lends an odd sort of beauty to the barren, degraded areas around here.<br /><br />An underdog sort of plant I admire for that reason - a similar status to the empty buildings that dot the degrading city landscape.bandithttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04291863523347898783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8824606926603448809.post-77481320283853962502011-12-28T10:08:55.011-06:002011-12-28T10:08:55.011-06:00Here is my offer,
we vow to meet again
at the nex...Here is my offer,<br /><br />we vow to meet again<br />at the next meteor shower<br /><br />or,<br />a talk about watching together <br />the Quadrantid meteors<br /><br /><br />But I also really like this,<br /><br />no one knows exactly<br />why the humpbacks sing<br /><br />:))<br /><br />Willie, what is the name of the flower at the picture?Vidahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09445214590810247776noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8824606926603448809.post-6216049614420117022011-12-28T09:29:47.219-06:002011-12-28T09:29:47.219-06:00Why not? Or, as Basho was alledged to have said, &...Why not? Or, as Basho was alledged to have said, "So what?"<br />And, <i>they</i> say, spreading the blame, as I certainly am no scholar, (another $60k in gov't school loans might make me an "official") ageku is released from certain limitations of recall, which reminds me of your prosaic offer -<br /><br />no one knows exactly<br />why the humpback whales sing<br /><br />or<br /><br />no one knows exactly<br />why the humpbacks sing<br /><br />or<br /><br />starry night<br />the whale songs reaching shore<br /><br />or? Anybody?bandithttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04291863523347898783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8824606926603448809.post-26030288879160192602011-12-28T07:37:34.180-06:002011-12-28T07:37:34.180-06:00sorry, forgot, can't use 'shore' again...sorry, forgot, can't use 'shore' again.<br /><br /><br />starry night<br />the whales sing to each otherpat nhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13175175191051242187noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8824606926603448809.post-75227713196462622132011-12-28T07:18:57.133-06:002011-12-28T07:18:57.133-06:00starry night
the whale songs reaching shorestarry night<br />the whale songs reaching shorepat nhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13175175191051242187noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8824606926603448809.post-45031970879396026512011-12-27T16:53:29.799-06:002011-12-27T16:53:29.799-06:00. . . slightly out of focus. . . slightly out of focusbandithttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04291863523347898783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8824606926603448809.post-15374715652097708262011-12-27T14:06:55.691-06:002011-12-27T14:06:55.691-06:00yes, a very beautiful flower - otherworldly ...
t...yes, a very beautiful flower - otherworldly ...<br /><br />the distant, ethereal, dreamy, spiritual, mystic, mystical; unearthly, unworldly, supernatural.pat nhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13175175191051242187noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8824606926603448809.post-47938491205781771262011-12-27T13:28:05.765-06:002011-12-27T13:28:05.765-06:00. . . do you like my picture?. . . do you like my picture?bandithttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04291863523347898783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-8824606926603448809.post-68835489842970298482011-12-27T07:49:53.177-06:002011-12-27T07:49:53.177-06:00Ah, coriander! Yes indeed. A healthy herb, however...Ah, coriander! Yes indeed. A healthy herb, however!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com