HAIKU BANDIT SOCIETY

Saturday, February 4, 2012

light frost and white sky
police cars on the corner
standing idle

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Bill said...: I wonder if "stand idle" and "on the corner" could change places?; February 4, 2012 at 2:08 PM
bandit said...: I see what you mean - subject, action

sometimes it comes down to cadence; maybe diversity of form - I'm still musing . . . reading textbooks on an entirely different subject, currently.; February 4, 2012 at 7:44 PM
bandit said...: . . . still musing. A "street corner" has significance, much like a kigo . . .; February 4, 2012 at 7:48 PM
Anonymous said...: They could change places, but it changes the emphasis. If you end with "stand idle," it seems to be about the police and inaction.; February 5, 2012 at 2:51 PM
Rick.Daddario said...: Interesting discussion.

snow and salt
the streets still crunch
in Minnesota; February 5, 2012 at 4:22 PM
bandit said...: It's actually just what popped into my wee brain - that's a good thing, right?; February 5, 2012 at 7:37 PM